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The nights are long and restless
I've begun to loose hope
hope that the sun will come
and melt this icy world full of pain
Waiting for my skins to be warmed
with the sweet caress of a new spring sun  
The days blur into to one
 the end of the tunnel keeps fading farther and farther away
and just when it seems in grasp
it dissipates like a mirage  
But with spring shall come the dawning of a new chance
a chance to prove my self once again
for the warmth of the sun will pave my path
and i will help me to see whats visible
for all it will take is the warmth of the sun
emerging from the spirits of others
but with the dull face of winter
all there is to do is wait
wait for the dawning of spring
for the blooming of new opportunities
for the nights of sleep
for the sickness to end
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~megmusicfreak Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you so much!!
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Mood: Love ~xjames7 Jan 13, 2013   Photographer
Nice poem Meg. I like it.
This is not a criticism, more of a question, but I was wondering why you haven't used punctuation or broken it into stanzas? Of course you don't have to, but sometimes it helps the reader get an idea of the pace and rhythm you intended. Still, I enjoyed it and I like the message of hope.
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~megmusicfreak Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you! and to be completely honest, i just quickly jotted down how i was feeling, a lot of times when I have time to sit down and really take my time on a poem i try to organize it some way and even try and think of a rhyme scheme... I usually start a poem off like this and if i like it enough i just change it around :)
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